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Post by Rob on Oct 7, 2003 23:25:42 GMT -5
Rob - another good effort. You write a very good Dru, and that can't be easy. I can just picture her as I read. I liked the way Angel and Wes related to each other also, and the way it played off the earlier Spike/Xander interaction. I can't wait to see what happens! I can't wait either. Now if I can just figure out what that might be... Thanks for the Dru comments. She is an absolute pain to write. It helps that I am a little nuts, so I can identify with her just enough. Chapter 7 is close to being finished. Thanks for sticking with me.
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Post by Betsy on Oct 12, 2003 2:21:01 GMT -5
I'm so glad you are continuing this story Rob. You have me in hook, line and sinker, anxiously awaiting each new installment.
I can picture everything in my head like an episode as I read the story.
Keep up the good work.
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Post by Rob on Oct 12, 2003 3:01:43 GMT -5
I'm so glad you are continuing this story Rob. You have me in hook, line and sinker, anxiously awaiting each new installment. I can picture everything in my head like an episode as I read the story. Keep up the good work. Thank you. Especially for your comment about picturing them like an episode. That is what I try to convey in every chapter...a feeling like each one is an hour-long episode in itself. With an unlimited special effects budget, of course. That's the really fun part.
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Post by Kerrie on Oct 30, 2003 16:06:46 GMT -5
Another nice chapter Rob. You had me fooled that it was going to contain explicit sex, but it didn't. I liked the Gold Coast reference. ;D (As an aside, the film "Muriel's Wedding" captures the Gold Coast including the manerisims of the people pretty well according to most people including people who live there). The Dru-speak was good as was Buffy and Spike's discussion mid-fight. The conversation between Wes and Dawn was suitably awkward. The conversation between Faith and Xander was OK too even if a bit too complete comared to RL conversations. Or maybe that is just my RL conversations.
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Post by RAKSHA on Oct 31, 2003 12:11:59 GMT -5
Thanks for the compliment about Riley. Writing Captain (now Major) Cardboard is very easy in this kind of environment. It'll be more of a challenge once he interacts with civilians. I consider Faith and Xander's conversation to be a pretty major event simply because it's the first time I've ever seen him actually agree to back off in a fanfic or on the show. Common sense dictates (at least to me) that a normal human - no matter how courageous - can only take so much punishment before it wears them down. In these stories, I've inflicted a lot on Xander. If there were no long term effects physically to all that damage, he wouldn't be a normal human. It looks like, at last, Faith is able to break through his brave front and get him to admit that he simply can't endure much more. I also believe that she finally found a way to communicate her fears regarding him without emasculating him (like in The Zeppo, where no one bothers to notice how much he hurts...they just want him to stay out of the way). In fact, she actually makes him feel good about himself while he confesses to his weaknesses. In short, Faith has grown into quite an amazing woman since marrying Xander. Therefore they made pretty significant steps in this chapter when it comes to Xander accepting himself. Now...can Xander be there for Faith the way he is for him? Oh, and thanks for the compliment regarding Wes and Dawn. I hopes everyone remembers that Dawn is 19 in this particular story. Otherwise people might get a tad squeamish about it all. I just think Dawn deserves someone...and so does Wes, for that matter. It's a cute pairing to me. But will they work out once everyone finds out about them? Stay tuned... When did Riley appear? I must have missed it.
Is ch. 9 up yet?
GAIL
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Post by Rob on Oct 31, 2003 19:19:08 GMT -5
When did Riley appear? I must have missed it.
Is ch. 9 up yet?
GAIL Actually, it might not be. Sorry to spoil it. I've always emailed chapters to Kerrie once I finish them because she's always been so generous and helpful with reviews. It should be up very soon, though. It's my fault for jumping the gun.
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Post by Rob on Oct 31, 2003 20:04:11 GMT -5
Actually, it might not be. Sorry to spoil it. I've always emailed chapters to Kerrie once I finish them because she's always been so generous and helpful with reviews. It should be up very soon, though. It's my fault for jumping the gun. Quoting myself for the first time ever...I deleted my spoilage post. I'm really sorry to all those who still come here and look.
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Post by Kerrie on Nov 1, 2003 15:55:59 GMT -5
Quoting myself for the first time ever...I deleted my spoilage post. I'm really sorry to all those who still come here and look. Sorry everyone for spoiling you. I didn't think. Sorry Rob. I have tried to fix it.
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Post by Kerrie on Nov 13, 2003 13:24:35 GMT -5
This time I waited for it to appear on the site. I didn't have a choice. Rob sent me the chapter, but I had to save it to disk which meant that it got lost in the computer. (I can never find or open anything once it has been "saved to disk"). No matter. Another great chapter Rob. I read it yesterday and have a memory like a sieve, but I remembered a few things. I liked the unseen, sleeping Spike who seemed to be always present. I liked Dawn rushing off to get ready instead of answering the door. And the other signs that Buffy is alert to Dawn hiding something. In typical Buffy fashion, she makes no comment. (The up-side of her not being one to share, she doesn't expect others to share.) I thought you promised Dawn action in this chapter. I waited. For every unidentified voice, I thought "this will be Wes" (I knew where Dawn was, so it couldn't be her.) We didn't see him at all. What a let-down/or a build-up depending on your perspective. I liked Dru. I think I like your formula for writing Dru: it makes it "Dru"-like and intelligible for the non-psychic/non-psychotic. I wasn't sure about the realness of Willow's response, but I think this might be just an Australian perception. (American TV shows and shows like "Oprah" often create this feeling of non-reality for me because of my perception of 'over-reaction'. It could be a residual Brittish tradition of disliking overt displays of emotion.) Once again I thought the reaction to Xander was an inappropriate over-reaction that focused too much on the hearer's feelings of guilt and anger at being 'excluded' and not enough on their interest and concern for Xander. So who was knocking at the door? Is it Wes or someone else looking for Buffy (etc.) or someone who is just lost (because you like messing with us)? Or did you already identify the caller and I just forgot? As I said I liked this chapter. I wasn't sure about Faith talking about putting on her "face". I can't see her caring about her appearance for an uninvited guest and maybe not even for anyone else, unless she was trying to impress. No doubt you are going to refer me to all the episodes where Faith fusses over her appearance or wears heaps of make-up. To me she seemed too matter-of-fact to obsess about her appearance.
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Nov 13, 2003 19:07:41 GMT -5
Hi Rob. You know I like this chapter. To semi-quote vamp Xander...'but I like all the chapters'.
I am anxious to see how the 'appearance' in the cemetary turns out...I think I know who goes there, but you have a knack for fooling the reader, as Joss did for the viewer. That's one of the things I enjoy about your writing - twists and turns around every corner.
I'm also eager to read the next sections dealing with Faith and Angel's conversation, and can't wait for Wesley to get into the house and see Dawn in front of the others. That should be fun.
Get Spike out of bed ok? He can't miss that....
Oh - and Andrew? Don't go there.
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Post by Rob on Nov 13, 2003 22:37:58 GMT -5
This time I waited for it to appear on the site. I didn't have a choice. Rob sent me the chapter, but I had to save it to disk which meant that it got lost in the computer. (I can never find or open anything once it has been "saved to disk"). No matter. Another great chapter Rob. I read it yesterday and have a memory like a sieve, but I remembered a few things. I liked the unseen, sleeping Spike who seemed to be always present. I liked Dawn rushing off to get ready instead of answering the door. And the other signs that Buffy is alert to Dawn hiding something. In typical Buffy fashion, she makes no comment. (The up-side of her not being one to share, she doesn't expect others to share.) I thought you promised Dawn action in this chapter. I waited. For every unidentified voice, I thought "this will be Wes" (I knew where Dawn was, so it couldn't be her.) We didn't see him at all. What a let-down/or a build-up depending on your perspective. I liked Dru. I think I like your formula for writing Dru: it makes it "Dru"-like and intelligible for the non-psychic/non-psychotic. I wasn't sure about the realness of Willow's response, but I think this might be just an Australian perception. (American TV shows and shows like "Oprah" often create this feeling of non-reality for me because of my perception of 'over-reaction'. It could be a residual Brittish tradition of disliking overt displays of emotion.) Once again I thought the reaction to Xander was an inappropriate over-reaction that focused too much on the hearer's feelings of guilt and anger at being 'excluded' and not enough on their interest and concern for Xander. So who was knocking at the door? Is it Wes or someone else looking for Buffy (etc.) or someone who is just lost (because you like messing with us)? Or did you already identify the caller and I just forgot? As I said I liked this chapter. I wasn't sure about Faith talking about putting on her "face". I can't see her caring about her appearance for an uninvited guest and maybe not even for anyone else, unless she was trying to impress. No doubt you are going to refer me to all the episodes where Faith fusses over her appearance or wears heaps of make-up. To me she seemed too matter-of-fact to obsess about her appearance. Hey, Dawn's in the chapter. What sort of action are you referring to, exactly? All things come in time, Kerrie. Writing Dru is no fun at all...though when I feel like I get it right, it's immensely gratifying. I'll never write her well, but just making seem "real" is achievement enough. Willow is more than a little self involved in this chapter, it's true. She's angry at herself, angry at them...she's in a complex emotional place. It will work itself out eventually, I'm sure. Thanks for the kind words. More coming soon.
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Post by Rob on Nov 14, 2003 0:15:09 GMT -5
As I said I liked this chapter. I wasn't sure about Faith talking about putting on her "face". I can't see her caring about her appearance for an uninvited guest and maybe not even for anyone else, unless she was trying to impress. No doubt you are going to refer me to all the episodes where Faith fusses over her appearance or wears heaps of make-up. To me she seemed too matter-of-fact to obsess about her appearance. I forgot to comment about this. I don't think Faith was entirely serious about changing her appearance all that much. Just playing with her old friend Angel a little bit. It worked, too. She got him into a spot of bother with Cordy. Nothing terribly meaningful there, really.
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Post by Kerrie on Nov 14, 2003 15:33:56 GMT -5
Hey, Dawn's in the chapter. What sort of action are you referring to, exactly? All things come in time, Kerrie. Writing Dru is no fun at all...though when I feel like I get it right, it's immensely gratifying. I'll never write her well, but just making seem "real" is achievement enough. Willow is more than a little self involved in this chapter, it's true. She's angry at herself, angry at them...she's in a complex emotional place. It will work itself out eventually, I'm sure. Thanks for the kind words. More coming soon. I wasn't expecting Dawn to get any horizontal action like you imply. I was just expecting her to see Wes. (I was actually expecting them to meet and quarrel, so I suppose I shouldn't be trying to speed it up.) I am sorry that Dru is no fun to write. She is fun to read!
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Post by Nickim on Nov 14, 2003 20:25:18 GMT -5
Great chapter, Rob. I like your choice of names for the secretary. Really enjoyed Willow's thoughts about headstones, etc. A person's just as dead with a huge monument.
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Post by Rob on Nov 15, 2003 0:42:03 GMT -5
Great chapter, Rob. I like your choice of names for the secretary. Really enjoyed Willow's thoughts about headstones, etc. A person's just as dead with a huge monument. Thanks, Nicki. Sorry I had Dru almost choke you to death. It's tough being Lilah's personal assistant, isn't it?
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