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Post by SpringSummers on Dec 15, 2003 8:52:23 GMT -5
Thank you. More coming pretty soon...if I ever get myself motivated. Between Christmas shopping and work, I find myself kinda tired lately. I'll probably have the next one ready to go sometime this week, though. Good job on the latest chapter, Rob. I gotta say though, I thought Wes should at least have gotten a black eye from Buffy or Spike or Xander or any combination thereof - or a split lip, or a loose tooth, or a minor skull fracture, or something - you know, before calmer heads prevailed. A little spot of violence, a bit o' bloodshed. Actually, I am just teasing you (while revealing my appreciation of violence). The reactions you wrote ran very true to the character development you have been doing. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Rob on Dec 15, 2003 11:05:14 GMT -5
Good job on the latest chapter, Rob. I gotta say though, I thought Wes should at least have gotten a black eye from Buffy or Spike or Xander or any combination thereof - or a split lip, or a loose tooth, or a minor skull fracture, or something - you know, before calmer heads prevailed. A little spot of violence, a bit o' bloodshed. Actually, I am just teasing you (while revealing my appreciation of violence). The reactions you wrote ran very true to the character development you have been doing. Keep up the good work. You may have a point there...maybe I'll have him fall down the stairs at the beginning of the next chapter or something.
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Post by SpringSummers on Jan 6, 2004 9:45:15 GMT -5
Nice job again, Rob - I really thought the Willow characterization was especially spot-on - nice going on bringing in a bit of that evil-Willow without sending her over the top.
Also loved the funny with Andrew and his weiners (AC/DC, indeed!), and the Spike and Angel bonding over Riley.
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Post by Rob on Jan 6, 2004 19:27:25 GMT -5
Nice job again, Rob - I really thought the Willow characterization was especially spot-on - nice going on bringing in a bit of that evil-Willow without sending her over the top. Also loved the funny with Andrew and his weiners (AC/DC, indeed!), and the Spike and Angel bonding over Riley. Thanks. Willow is going to take center stage in the next chapter as well.
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Post by SpringSummers on Jan 13, 2004 9:05:34 GMT -5
The spot-on characterizations continue. That is what I like best.
My favorite lines:
ANGEL: "You listen to Dylan?”
BUFFY: “If I turn it up really loud his voice scares the bugs away. Could we get back to whatever point you were trying to make?”
HA! I love it, and I think I'm going to try this whenever I have bug problems at home.
I liked the way Riley was thinking about Dawn, and all the Spike & Buffy stuff. . . and as to that ending, I can only say: "Say whut??"
You completely surprised me, even though you did set it up. Nice work.
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Post by Rob on Jan 13, 2004 23:11:35 GMT -5
The spot-on characterizations continue. That is what I like best. My favorite lines: ANGEL: "You listen to Dylan?” BUFFY: “If I turn it up really loud his voice scares the bugs away. Could we get back to whatever point you were trying to make?” HA! I love it, and I think I'm going to try this whenever I have bug problems at home. I liked the way Riley was thinking about Dawn, and all the Spike & Buffy stuff. . . and as to that ending, I can only say: "Say whut??" You completely surprised me, even though you did set it up. Nice work. Thank you very much. I think I've managed to make you my last living reviewer. Knew I'd drive 'em away eventually. Anyway, I'm glad you thought enough of the dialogue to quote a little of it. I try hard to keep the core characters as real as I can...while tweaking them just enough to make me happy. It's a delicate balance sometimes. I'm really happy you were surprised at the end...though I did no more than hint vaguely in previous chapters. As for Riley...I always liked him, though he's not a character I could build a story around. In this particular place, he is perfect for my purposes. He learned hard and painful lessons from being with Buffy...but they were important and relevant. Buffy (at least in my Universe) is far better prepared for a real relationship; the woman's been around this block a time or two. Spike, on the other hand, doesn't have any real frame of reference outside of Dru...and the question is, does that experience prepare him for a relationship with a human being, Slayer or otherwise? Maturity and experience...every romantic relationship I focus on in this story has one person with a good deal more than the other. Love is there...that isn't in question. But is that enough? Anyway, thanks for reading...and most of all, for reviewing. It's great to know people are still out there.
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Post by Queen E on Jan 14, 2004 9:42:27 GMT -5
There were several points I found of interest thus far:
1) It was wonderful to see you address the "take you into the light" sword of Damacles that has hung over the Angel-Spike-Buffy dynamic, and I think you handled it deftly and true to character.
2) Nice work at capturing Ethan's voice.
3) Riley was very nicely drawn, as has been mentioned by others. He is a hard character to write for: he's dependable, loyal, and at his best has a great deal of self-respect. It is EXTREMELY difficult to write someone like that, because the drama needs to come from the forces around his, rather than internally, which can run the risk of manipulating events to create drama rather than allowing it to flow naturally.
4) This is not so much a comment as an area of concern: One thing that has always bothered me about the Jossverse is the portrayel of pregnancy (really an Angel issue, rather than a Buffy one). Both Cordelia's mystical pregnancy with the context of the show have led to her being both exploited by and an active participant in evil; which makes me think Joss has some issues with either childhood or pregnancy (or not, this could be my issue). I'm crossing my fingers that this pregnancy is a good thing, but I'm along for the ride wherever you take it; so please take these comments with a huge grain of salt.
Keep going, Rob...I've read all of the Chronicles and have watched you grow and develop as a writer and increase your level of comfort with the characters enough to take them to places neither they nor us were expecting.
Rock on.
Erin
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Post by Laura on Jan 14, 2004 10:10:46 GMT -5
There were several points I found of interest thus far: 1) It was wonderful to see you address the "take you into the light" sword of Damacles that has hung over the Angel-Spike-Buffy dynamic, and I think you handled it deftly and true to character. 2) Nice work at capturing Ethan's voice. 3) Riley was very nicely drawn, as has been mentioned by others. He is a hard character to write for: he's dependable, loyal, and at his best has a great deal of self-respect. It is EXTREMELY difficult to write someone like that, because the drama needs to come from the forces around his, rather than internally, which can run the risk of manipulating events to create drama rather than allowing it to flow naturally. 4) This is not so much a comment as an area of concern: One thing that has always bothered me about the Jossverse is the portrayel of pregnancy (really an Angel issue, rather than a Buffy one). Both Cordelia's mystical pregnancy with the context of the show have led to her being both exploited by and an active participant in evil; which makes me think Joss has some issues with either childhood or pregnancy (or not, this could be my issue). I'm crossing my fingers that this pregnancy is a good thing, but I'm along for the ride wherever you take it; so please take these comments with a huge grain of salt. Keep going, Rob...I've read all of the Chronicles and have watched you grow and develop as a writer and increase your level of comfort with the characters enough to take them to places neither they nor us were expecting. Rock on. Erin I'll do a "me too" to all of Spring's and Erin's comments, and tack on a great big "HUH?" for the ending of the last chapter. Did I miss something in the earlier chapters? Do I have to go back and re-read them? Because I sure don't remember Willow having an "up close and personal"moment with anybody, and besides, "gay now!"
Well, you've got me hooked but good. All I have left to say is please don't leave us dangling too long with this cliff-hanger before you give us another chapter!
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Post by Nickim on Jan 14, 2004 14:27:11 GMT -5
Rob, I finally got caught up with Trust. Andrew, "love weiners". Tee Hee Great exchange between Willow & Ethan on the plane. Nice little suprise at the end. Please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter. Nicki, who is NOT an idiot ;D
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Post by Rob on Jan 14, 2004 22:24:47 GMT -5
There were several points I found of interest thus far: 1) It was wonderful to see you address the "take you into the light" sword of Damacles that has hung over the Angel-Spike-Buffy dynamic, and I think you handled it deftly and true to character. 2) Nice work at capturing Ethan's voice. 3) Riley was very nicely drawn, as has been mentioned by others. He is a hard character to write for: he's dependable, loyal, and at his best has a great deal of self-respect. It is EXTREMELY difficult to write someone like that, because the drama needs to come from the forces around his, rather than internally, which can run the risk of manipulating events to create drama rather than allowing it to flow naturally. 4) This is not so much a comment as an area of concern: One thing that has always bothered me about the Jossverse is the portrayel of pregnancy (really an Angel issue, rather than a Buffy one). Both Cordelia's mystical pregnancy with the context of the show have led to her being both exploited by and an active participant in evil; which makes me think Joss has some issues with either childhood or pregnancy (or not, this could be my issue). I'm crossing my fingers that this pregnancy is a good thing, but I'm along for the ride wherever you take it; so please take these comments with a huge grain of salt. Keep going, Rob...I've read all of the Chronicles and have watched you grow and develop as a writer and increase your level of comfort with the characters enough to take them to places neither they nor us were expecting. Rock on. Erin Thank you very much for the nice comments. I completely agree about Riley; he is a tough guy to write...generally he's a decent person without a whole lot of personality. There just isn't anything to hang your hat on in terms of character. In this case, however, he served his purpose. The plot moved forward. As far as the pregnancy goes...I don't want to say too much about that little plot point right now. I do agree, though, that Joss didn't see a whole lot of positivity there. There will be a new chapter coming soon.
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Post by Rob on Jan 14, 2004 22:33:54 GMT -5
I'll do a "me too" to all of Spring's and Erin's comments, and tack on a great big "HUH?" for the ending of the last chapter. Did I miss something in the earlier chapters? Do I have to go back and re-read them? Because I sure don't remember Willow having an "up close and personal"moment with anybody, and besides, "gay now!"
Well, you've got me hooked but good. All I have left to say is please don't leave us dangling too long with this cliff-hanger before you give us another chapter! Hmmm...trying to remember if there are any hints in previous chapters...well, Willow certainly didn't get groiny with anyone as far as I know. I'll have to re-check to be certain. Might have been a different sort of hint here and there, though. Thanks for reading. I'll try to live up to the buildup.
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Post by Rob on Jan 14, 2004 22:37:25 GMT -5
Rob, I finally got caught up with Trust. Andrew, "love weiners". Tee Hee Great exchange between Willow & Ethan on the plane. Nice little suprise at the end. Please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter. Nicki, who is NOT an idiot ;D Working for Lilah is a tricky job, no? She's like Angel...takes everything out on the poor administrative assistant.
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Jan 15, 2004 20:43:45 GMT -5
The spot-on characterizations continue. That is what I like best. My favorite lines: ANGEL: "You listen to Dylan?” BUFFY: “If I turn it up really loud his voice scares the bugs away. Could we get back to whatever point you were trying to make?” HA! I love it, and I think I'm going to try this whenever I have bug problems at home. I liked the way Riley was thinking about Dawn, and all the Spike & Buffy stuff. . . and as to that ending, I can only say: "Say whut??" You completely surprised me, even though you did set it up. Nice work. I've been BETA-ing The story and I fell out of my chair! Ok ok, if you actually pay attention there are clues but I never would have suspected. But not just the end of the chapter - the whole chapter was terrific - loved it all - ok - not 'happy' with it all....there is that one painful scene...but it rings true. Rob, you never disappoint - thank you!
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Post by Cal on Jan 24, 2004 11:06:51 GMT -5
Rob, brilliant new chapter! I have been reading this story with interest. You manage to get the characterisation just right in all of your fiction. I look forward to the next installment eagerly!
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Post by Laura on Jan 24, 2004 12:01:34 GMT -5
Want more. Want more NOW!
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