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Post by SpringSummers on Jul 7, 2004 7:57:44 GMT -5
Patti!
Nice Chapter 3! I like that Ranger Smith isn't what she seems to be.
Also, good character stuff, especially with Spike & Dawn. Good job on the singing parts, also.
I look forward to your next chapter!
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Post by SpringSummers on Jul 12, 2004 12:36:33 GMT -5
Oh Rob - such a good chapter! You are so talented with the funny,and the characterizations, and now with the poetry too.
My favorite laugh out loud line (and there was more than one): ""You live with him. He's used to seeing your face in the morning," Anya said. "If he can handle that horrible experience, I vote for sanity."
Hee.
I like the direction the story is going in. Good work!
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Post by LadyDi on Jul 12, 2004 16:10:21 GMT -5
Oh, Rob! [Channeling Laura Petrie]
Your chapter reminded me just how lucky Spike was to have a support group (no matter how reluctant) in his struggle to reintegrate.
Nice call back on Anya's "Wagnerian" snoring, too.
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Post by Lola m on Jul 13, 2004 10:10:29 GMT -5
Wow! Major kudos to Vlad and Patti and Rob for handling the Sweet plot turn! Loving all the songs - how they are introduced, the revelations they bring, the songs themselves. You are all waaaay talented in this area.
On the latest chapter, much appreciation to Rob. I am enjoying your twist on the cliffhanger Patti gave you - I am interested to see how things continue with the ranger. Loved your sweet poetic opening lines with the multiple "Dawns". Very effective and scary bits with Spike in the van and the taunting by TFE.
In particular I really enjoyed the little interaction between Xander and Anya and Willow. Very funny and true characterizations.
Lola
Keep it up guys. I can hardly wait for the next chapter!
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Post by Laura on Jul 15, 2004 20:55:43 GMT -5
Nice work, Rob! One question -- the part where you first have Dawn hurting her mouth, and can't talk? Where she's saying "OW! MF! "?
Was that a deliberate shout-out to OMWF (slightly sideways, of course)?[/size]
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Post by Rob on Jul 15, 2004 22:26:37 GMT -5
Nice work, Rob! One question -- the part where you first have Dawn hurting her mouth, and can't talk? Where she's saying "OW! MF! "?
Was that a deliberate shout-out to OMWF (slightly sideways, of course)? [/size][/quote] Yes, that was deliberate. Thanks for noticing.  |
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Post by Rob on Jul 15, 2004 22:35:53 GMT -5
Wow! Major kudos to Vlad and Patti and Rob for handling the Sweet plot turn! Loving all the songs - how they are introduced, the revelations they bring, the songs themselves. You are all waaaay talented in this area. On the latest chapter, much appreciation to Rob. I am enjoying your twist on the cliffhanger Patti gave you - I am interested to see how things continue with the ranger. Loved your sweet poetic opening lines with the multiple "Dawns". Very effective and scary bits with Spike in the van and the taunting by TFE. In particular I really enjoyed the little interaction between Xander and Anya and Willow. Very funny and true characterizations. Lola Keep it up guys. I can hardly wait for the next chapter! This story was set up so well by everyone else, it practically wrote itself. I threw the First into the mix because Round Robins are almost always comedic in nature, and I wanted to see if a serious plotline could be carried out with multiple authors. In that way, the Round Robin is sort of liberating. You can do virtually anything you want...as long as you give the next writer a choice of places to go. |
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Post by Rob on Jul 15, 2004 22:41:09 GMT -5
Oh Rob - such a good chapter! You are so talented with the funny,and the characterizations, and now with the poetry too. My favorite laugh out loud line (and there was more than one): ""You live with him. He's used to seeing your face in the morning," Anya said. "If he can handle that horrible experience, I vote for sanity." Hee. I like the direction the story is going in. Good work! Though I deeply appreciate the praise, Spring, you're being far too kind about the poetry. Frankly, I think it's God-awful. I'd love to say that's intentional what with Spike's reputation...but it ain't so. Truth is, I really tried to make it decent, and failed spectacularly. Poetry will never be my thing, obviously.  Strangely, though, the first paragraph in this chapter is, in my opinion, among my better pieces of writing. Strange what can come out when you're just letting it flow, rather than stressing about every last word like I do in my solo work. |
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Post by SpringSummers on Jul 16, 2004 5:36:30 GMT -5
Though I deeply appreciate the praise, Spring, you're being far too kind about the poetry. Frankly, I think it's God-awful. I'd love to say that's intentional what with Spike's reputation...but it ain't so. Truth is, I really tried to make it decent, and failed spectacularly. Poetry will never be my thing, obviously. Strangely, though, the first paragraph in this chapter is, in my opinion, among my better pieces of writing. Strange what can come out when you're just letting it flow, rather than stressing about every last word like I do in my solo work. Ah, Rob - now you disillusioned me! OK, so the poetry wasn't Shakespeare, but I did think the bloody awful touches were deliberate. And yes - your Spike & Dawn opening was bravissimo! (imagine me cupping my hand so that the thumb touches the two fingers nearest it, kissing the top of those three fingers, then letting the kiss fly). |
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Post by raenstorm on Jul 16, 2004 13:37:30 GMT -5
This story was set up so well by everyone else, it practically wrote itself. I threw the First into the mix because Round Robins are almost always comedic in nature, and I wanted to see if a serious plotline could be carried out with multiple authors.In that way, the Round Robin is sort of liberating. You can do virtually anything you want...as long as you give the next writer a choice of places to go. Ooooh... is THAT what you were doing? Oops. |
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Post by Karen on Jul 16, 2004 13:59:32 GMT -5
Great Round Robin! I'm all quivery with anticipation over what will happen next.
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Post by Rob on Jul 17, 2004 23:18:18 GMT -5
Ooooh... is THAT what you were doing? Oops.I have one word for this. [glow=red,2,300]Sigh.[/glow] |
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Post by William the Bloody on Jul 19, 2004 21:09:24 GMT -5
This story was set up so well by everyone else, it practically wrote itself. I threw the First into the mix because Round Robins are almost always comedic in nature, and I wanted to see if a serious plotline could be carried out with multiple authors. In that way, the Round Robin is sort of liberating. You can do virtually anything you want...as long as you give the next writer a choice of places to go. yep, yep... I threw Sweet at you to see what would happen and then you tossed the First back at us... Personally, I am still waiting to see if Rae can make the First sing... *pauses* okay,I jsut thought of somethign that would be fun... darn it...that's the thing about RR's... you have these great ideas that you don't get to actually write because by the time it gets back to you, the story went somewhere else...it's liek being at a big party and never getting to finish a conversation. Anyhow, I really like this RR. I think our (and yes I am even including my normally "aw shucks" self in here) overall writing of it has been a notch above the ordinary for such a creature. I thjink we are handling a moderately serious plotline together well, considering none of us know where in the heck it's going. *L* Well, I have plans... but...I know that the three of you (Rob, Rae and Patti) will jsut dash them all to smithereens. In Rae's immortal words..."Whatevahhh!" Vlad Oh..by the way, I think it's getting larger. ;D V. |
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Post by William the Bloody on Jul 19, 2004 21:13:01 GMT -5
Aren't you doing one of the chapters? Oh, and lovely work, Rae and Vlad, thus far. It has a really Scooby feeling to it, in both the Buffy and Scooby-doo sense! Looking forward to seeing what's next. I am so glad you picked up on that. Yes, I tried really hard to endow it with that Scooby Doo feeling, stopping only short of having Ranger Smith say "you meddling kids" and putting Spike in an ascot.  Vlad |
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Post by William the Bloody on Jul 19, 2004 21:20:10 GMT -5
It is fun - but certainly presents a challenge to all you writers! Of course, that is half the fun of the RR - presenting a challenge to your co-writers. VLAD! Nice work! Loved the wee wee-wee break. Now you just need to have someone with a wee wee-wee decide he needs a wee wee-wee break, and then . . . is Andrew in the van? Thanks for the fun! Oh, yeah! My first thought was ... Sweeet! My second thought was ... man, Vlad is Eeeevil! ;D 'Cuz that is really gonna be challenge. But you guys are up to it, I know! Really enjoying this RR - thanks, guys. Lola I am so glad you guys are enjoying this. I wish I could say the "wee wee" thing was some sort of inspirational humor, but really, jsut as I was writing Spike's " Taking a wee break..." I realized how it could be twisted and went from there. Really, my chapter 2 jsut sorta wrote itself...took me like maybe 2-3 hours one morning to do while I was chatting with Rae and Patti. I wish they all came so easily. And yes... I am evil...roughly 84 percent, I believe *L* My writing compatriots all said pretty much the same thing. But I think they enjoyed the challenge it set up. And really, Sweet is one of my favorite baddies that "got away." I missed him. Vlad |
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