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Post by TechnoSlut on Jun 18, 2004 6:52:25 GMT -5
Welcome to the S'cubie Round Robin #1 Review Area.
Yeah, yeah... I *know* it isn't actually out there yet! So, sue me. I'm procrastinating my writing as fast as I can! Just wanted to get this thread in place so I'll have a place to link once I get my chapter done.
Look for Chapter 1 at the S3 website soon!
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Jun 21, 2004 15:11:08 GMT -5
Rae, I loved it! A great beginning! Made me grin all the way through, especially the wink-wink of reality shows on the WB and celebrity poker! The flash of pink and the blonde hair made me think you had written Harm it at first, and I love the references to Willow as The Goddess....very neat!
*hug* I know I don't have time right now anyway but I envy Joshua - hope he picks the right slayer!
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Post by raenstorm on Jun 21, 2004 15:15:00 GMT -5
Rae, I loved it! A great beginning! Made me grin all the way through, especially the wink-wink of reality shows on the WB and celebrity poker! The flash of pink and the blonde hair made me think you had written Harm it at first, and I love the references to Willow as The Goddess....very neat! *hug* I know I don't have time right now anyway but I envy Joshua - hope he picks the right slayer! Damn, you know my mind too well! Or, you just think like I do... hmmm. But, thank you  |
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Post by Cal on Jun 22, 2004 5:02:10 GMT -5
Wonderful chapter, Rae! Just wonderful! ;D
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Post by Lola m on Jun 22, 2004 5:36:54 GMT -5
Well, Rae - you clever minx you. Got 'em out of the alley without having to explain how yet. ;D You gave us a very good chapter one; it leaps right in with our main characters and leaves lots of tantalizing hints at others. Love the idea of a slayer "safe house". And you put in enough possible plot lines here to give us lots of choices. Go, you!
I can hardly wait to read the next one and see where Joshua takes us - even tho' each chapter brings me closer to my doom.....
Lola
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Post by raenstorm on Jun 22, 2004 7:00:13 GMT -5
Well, Rae - you clever minx you. Got 'em out of the alley without having to explain why yet. ;D You gave us a very good chapter one; it leaps right in with our main characters and leaves lots of tantalizing hints at others. Love the idea of a slayer "safe house". And you put in enough possible plot lines here to give us lots of choices. Go, you! I can hardly wait to read the next one and see where Joshua takes us - even tho' each chapter brings me closer to my doom..... Lola lol... Nobody ever said I had to explain the how  Thanks, Lola! |
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Post by SpringSummers on Aug 3, 2004 6:46:05 GMT -5
Well, Rae - you clever minx you. Got 'em out of the alley without having to explain why yet. ;D You gave us a very good chapter one; it leaps right in with our main characters and leaves lots of tantalizing hints at others. Love the idea of a slayer "safe house". And you put in enough possible plot lines here to give us lots of choices. Go, you! I can hardly wait to read the next one and see where Joshua takes us - even tho' each chapter brings me closer to my doom..... Lola You are a minx also, Lola. Willow! Nice surprise. And Xander! Nice addition. You handled the chapter and characters well. I liked the way the slayerettes were giggling over their hostage's attributes. And of course, oil is always a good touch. Brava! |
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Post by Queen E on Aug 3, 2004 9:11:54 GMT -5
You are a minx also, Lola. Willow! Nice surprise. And Xander! Nice addition. You handled the chapter and characters well. I liked the way the slayerettes were giggling over their hostage's attributes. And of course, oil is always a good touch. Brava! And the subtle S'cubie shout outs (say that 3 times fast): Diane's pool cue, ostrich feathers and peanut butter... Really nice work, Lola. Your writing is very sprightly! |
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Post by Lola m on Aug 3, 2004 14:40:53 GMT -5
You are a minx also, Lola. Willow! Nice surprise. And Xander! Nice addition. You handled the chapter and characters well. I liked the way the slayerettes were giggling over their hostage's attributes. And of course, oil is always a good touch. Brava! And the subtle S'cubie shout outs (say that 3 times fast): Diane's pool cue, ostrich feathers and peanut butter... Really nice work, Lola. Your writing is very sprightly! Thanks so much, Autumn Spring and Erin! Since I really admire the writing of both of you, that means a lot. (Sometimes I think what I turned in is kinda dorky and stilted, but I also know that I could re-write it from now 'til doomsday and still not be happy, so I just bit the bullet.  ) I was definitely feeling very minx-y and had a lot of fun with my “non-resolution" and the s’cubie bits in particular. And oil? Always a good thing.  Lola |
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Post by raenstorm on Aug 5, 2004 8:58:35 GMT -5
I know I already told you but lovely job, Lola! I loved it. Nice to see the pattern continuing as well... wonder who will finally tell us what happeend ;D
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Aug 5, 2004 15:07:46 GMT -5
Lola! Great chapter! You have a talent for this! Made me laugh outloud and you got the voices and personalities really well! I loved Spike bouncing the peanut off Angel's head, and Xander! Whee! Xander is here! The Playstation thing was really funny, and my gosh you have Illyria down girl! LOL!
I liked the S'cubie shoutouts...but you dawg you! We still don't know how they got out of the alley! So....I'll go next and see if I can weasel out of it too!
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Post by Lola m on Aug 5, 2004 18:33:27 GMT -5
Lola! Great chapter! You have a talent for this! Made me laugh outloud and you got the voices and personalities really well! I loved Spike bouncing the peanut off Angel's head, and Xander! Whee! Xander is here! The Playstation thing was really funny, and my gosh you have Illyria down girl! LOL! I liked the S'cubie shoutouts...but you dawg you! We still don't know how they got out of the alley! So....I'll go next and see if I can weasel out of it too! **snicker** Hey, we can all be weasels together! Thanks for the kind words, Patti! (Writing Illyria is fun. You'll have a blast!) Lola |
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Sept 12, 2004 0:15:33 GMT -5
**snicker** Hey, we can all be weasels together! Thanks for the kind words, Patti! (Writing Illyria is fun. You'll have a blast!) Lola well, I DID weasel out of it! I gave up and Vlad wrote it! LOL! (I wrote the first....four I think) paragraphs..) I don't think he has posted it yet - soon as he does go check it out, he did good! |
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Post by William the Bloody on Sept 15, 2004 15:27:48 GMT -5
well, I DID weasel out of it! I gave up and Vlad wrote it! LOL! (I wrote the first....four I think) paragraphs..) I don't think he has posted it yet - soon as he does go check it out, he did good! You wrote the first 6 paragraph breaks as it is posted, ending with "Other dimensions? Plural? You did have a little bit more written that I had to edit because it didn't quite fit the timeframe of the story as I wanted it. I think I lopped outta sentence or two and maybe altered a couple phrases... And thank you! I don't know if it's good, but it moves the story along. Vlad |
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Sept 15, 2004 16:11:53 GMT -5
You wrote the first 6 paragraph breaks as it is posted, ending with "Other dimensions? Plural? You did have a little bit more written that I had to edit because it didn't quite fit the timeframe of the story as I wanted it. I think I lopped outta sentence or two and maybe altered a couple phrases... And thank you! I don't know if it's good, but it moves the story along. Vlad It moves the story along and sets a heck of a problem in place! I'm assuming anyone reading this has read the story thus far...right? if not, read no further! by putting the magic bubble around the world, they can't go zooming off into another dimension - can't zap the dragons back - they have to find the solution in 'our' - 'their' world...makes it harder, which also means no cop outs .... and we still don't know how they got out of that alley! Do we? And when? was it four days, a week, a few weeks? seems like time is wonky..... And may I mention Goh’d Xillastra? *LOL!* |
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