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Post by Riff on Mar 11, 2005 10:32:28 GMT -5
Riff, I really enjoyed chapter One of Happy Endings - am very impressed with your voices- and your characterizations - they ring true. Also, I loved the way you thought to use Fred's words from season four to create that portal - it is such a pleasure when a fan fic author so thoroughly knows the 'verse he's entered. I'm looking forward to the other chapters, and other stories to come! Some of the finest Jossverse fic writers around are S'cubies and now we have another. Lucky us!! Thank you so much, Patti. A ring of truth is what I was aiming for, and I’m very gratified you and others have found the characterisations to have a degree of accuracy. I’ve tried to make this tale as much a part of the Angelverse as is possible. I hope you also enjoy future chapters. Riff.
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Post by Anne, Old S'cubie Cat on Mar 11, 2005 11:41:12 GMT -5
This is great, Riff. Your story flows naturally from the end of NFA. I especially liked the way you used what had already been established, Fred's and Illyria's knowledge and skills, instead of having rescue come from outside.
You've also done a wonderful job with the characters - I can hear the actors saying those lines.
I'm really looking forward to the next episode.
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Post by Jan on Mar 11, 2005 13:12:18 GMT -5
I have nothing to say that hasn't already been said, accept that I agree with all the "already been said."
Not a fan of fanfic, but you may turn me. Certainly I'm looking forward to next Thursday.
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Post by Lola m on Mar 11, 2005 22:21:07 GMT -5
Well, first I want to eetah the things that everyone else loved - the logical and clever use of the portal; the characterizations that ring very true; the chillingly true "one left".
You seem to have a deft hand with both the action sequences (the flight down the sewer tunnels, for example) as well as character summarization (saying of Lilah "she breathed a laugh in that genuine and yet utterly humourless way of hers").
But oh poor bitter dead-and-back-again Wes! (I liked the moment of empathy we see from Spike.)
Looking forward to the next installment.
Lola
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Post by Riff on Mar 12, 2005 15:36:16 GMT -5
This is great, Riff. Your story flows naturally from the end of NFA. I especially liked the way you used what had already been established, Fred's and Illyria's knowledge and skills, instead of having rescue come from outside. You've also done a wonderful job with the characters - I can hear the actors saying those lines. I'm really looking forward to the next episode. And I’m really looking forward to hearing what you think of it! Thank you so much, Anne. Riff.
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Post by Riff on Mar 12, 2005 15:36:58 GMT -5
I have nothing to say that hasn't already been said, accept that I agree with all the "already been said." Not a fan of fanfic, but you may turn me. Certainly I'm looking forward to next Thursday. I’m glad you liked it, Winter. Thank you. I hope next Thursday does not disappoint. Riff.
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Post by Riff on Mar 12, 2005 15:38:48 GMT -5
Well, first I want to eetah the things that everyone else loved - the logical and clever use of the portal; the characterizations that ring very true; the chillingly true "one left". You seem to have a deft hand with both the action sequences (the flight down the sewer tunnels, for example) as well as character summarization (saying of Lilah "she breathed a laugh in that genuine and yet utterly humourless way of hers"). But oh poor bitter dead-and-back-again Wes! (I liked the moment of empathy we see from Spike.) Looking forward to the next installment. Lola Thank you, Lola. I’m pleased you liked it! I very much enjoyed writing that flight down the sewers. I could visualise it quite vivdly. And I like to try and recreate the characters as much as I can. Working on this has been both interesting and satisfying. And, yes, poor old Wesley. We’ll just have to see how things turn out for him. Riff.
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Post by Cal on Mar 13, 2005 16:05:54 GMT -5
Excellent start, Riff. I loved the solution to getting everyone out of the alley. This is exactly how I could imagine it happening in S6 of AtS. Perfect voices and characterisation. I'm very impressed! Looking forward to seeing where you take it from here.
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Post by Riff on Mar 15, 2005 7:29:46 GMT -5
Excellent start, Riff. I loved the solution to getting everyone out of the alley. This is exactly how I could imagine it happening in S6 of AtS. Perfect voices and characterisation. I'm very impressed! Looking forward to seeing where you take it from here. More kind words. I'm glad you liked it, Cal. Thank you! I hope you'll find some things to enjoy in the rest of the fic.
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Post by Anne, Old S'cubie Cat on Mar 17, 2005 17:05:29 GMT -5
I just read the second chapter. Oh, poor, poor Wes! Even heaven isn't heaven without Fred.
I'm fascinated that Illyria has written a Fred-article, and that dream-Fred told Wes to read it. I can't wait to find out what that leads to.
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Post by Patti - S'cubie Cutie on Mar 17, 2005 17:38:11 GMT -5
you have the cliff-hanger thing down, Riff... It just gets better...
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Post by SpringSummers on Mar 17, 2005 19:42:54 GMT -5
Wow. Wes is very bitter and angry and self-righteous. All of which I can buy as the way he would be, under the circumstances. Though I have faith that he'll find some relief and perspective . . . no, I'm not asking for any hints, not really. I wanna be surprised.
I always thought Wes's . . . outward anger and bitterness toward others was due, underneath it all, to his own feelings of guilt and anger toward himself - to his own feelings of helplessness.
Again, very nice characterizations, and nice continuity slipping in the (at first) Buffy-like "I was in heaven."
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Post by Lola m on Mar 17, 2005 21:54:53 GMT -5
Another very good chapter, Riff!
I think, in particular, I really like your little touches that ring so true.
The fact that Illyria is obsessed with ritual like keeping Wes' calendar up to date. Wes comparing the way he feels to Fred when she just back from the other dimension. Illyria submitting an article, in effect, "for" Wes and Fred!! The different (and totally in character for each) reactions of Angel, Spike, and Gunn.
The brief mentions of Wes' father were nicely done - not overwhelming, but as present and important as we know his father's influence must be in Wes. Plus? Creepy! As it should be. (Can you tell I really don't like his dad?)
The slightly different twist on the "back from heaven" concept was very interesting. No Fred, so therefore not really perfect. But, I wonder, was there no Fred because her soul was destroyed, or because it is still somewhere inside Illyria?
And then the bombshell of the paper title! Neatly done, sir, neatly done!
Looking forward to the next bit.
Lola
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Post by Riff on Mar 18, 2005 3:48:01 GMT -5
I just read the second chapter. Oh, poor, poor Wes! Even heaven isn't heaven without Fred. I'm fascinated that Illyria has written a Fred-article, and that dream-Fred told Wes to read it. I can't wait to find out what that leads to. Thank you, Anne! IMO, what we saw in canon was the way Wesley would react to Fred’s mere death, not how he would react to the destruction of her soul. For me, that needed to be shown. Wesley. He’s at his lowest ebb now, and it’s not surprising. He has (in the context of the Jossverse) a fundamentally unnatural loss to deal with. And, of course, he can’t deal with it. I’d say that he’s right on the edge of a doorway into darkness himself. The way he turns on Angel, Spike, and Gunn is an indication of these things, I think. But, there seems to be something about that article that has got him interested despite his feelings. I wonder what that is…? Riff.
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Post by Riff on Mar 18, 2005 3:56:06 GMT -5
you have the cliff-hanger thing down, Riff... It just gets better... I don’t do it on purpose, Patti, really. They just pop into my mind, usually accompanied by a big orchestral chord. ;D Thank you. Riff.
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